Sonnet XXX
Sonnet XXX
Galactic Collision
Galactic collision occurred in space
at the rim of the universal plane.
The spiral arms, distorted from the base
of the center, were flung out with much strain.
A supermassive black hole gobbled up
matter that was obviously not dust.
The singularity appeared to sup
on its immense neighbor. In the robust
bright point resource, blasting out X-ray beams,
a plethora of objects that looked blue,
populated Gemini. Dust, it seems
hid energy. Gravity will ensue ―
the smaller body will finally lose;
as ripped, torn gases snap off and diffuse.
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This comes from @badastronomer’s Discover Magazine blog .
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Posted on May 5, 2011, in D’verse Poets Pub, Poetry, Sonnets and tagged beams, black hole, collision, diffuse, dust, dverse, dversepoets, gases, gemini, glactic, gobbled, gravity, immense, plethora, ripped, singularity, spiral galaxies, supermassive, universal, x-ray, xxx. Bookmark the permalink. 35 Comments.
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The visual created is beautiful! Such a powerful event in prose! Lovely!
Saying what a powerful event in prose just gave me chills. mmmm
A new frontier for poets – well done.
Ah. A Star Trek reference. I like it.
creation a evolutionary work that draws you in. Big Bang, theory of relativity… this is relative to me.
Thank you
Michael
such an amazing picture and sonnet too. keep it up!
very,very cool picture and so cool sonnet. your still on a roll.
for someone not that interested in space or final frontiers …I really enjoyed this …thank you x
Outer and some inner space, I think, fully explored with a nice Big Bang.
Interesting subject for a sonnet – liking that you put science into poetry. Iambic pentameter is awry though, looks like you’ve counted ten syllables per line rather than five iambs (counting syllables for strict meter like iambic pent is a minefield)
di-DUM | di-DUM | di-DUM | di-DUM | di-DUM is how it should sound –
shall I | com PARE | thee TO | a SUM | mer’s DAY?
Your first line currently reads like this –
ga LAC | tic col | LI sion | o CCURED | in SPACE
ie ‘collision’ is unstress/stress/unstress when you need the opposite to fall into that particular place in the line. Apologies if you were intentionally disregarding the iambic pentameter for a modern take on a Shakespearean English Sonnet.
Yes. I am doing a modern take. I use a lot of techincal words in my space/science sonnets, and those words would not fit into Iambic pentamenter. The purpose is to take the sci/tech aspects and make it a sonnet, make it emotional, make it lit, make it beutiful, while stil maintaining some sci/tech within. Have to use those vocab words which did not exist in Elizbethan times.
It’s not true that scientific words/more complex diction doesn’t fit into iambic pentameter. You just have to juggle the syntax etc. It’s a knack you get from practice. You can put real long and complex words into iambic meter. You have to feel where the main stress is, that’s all, and make it fit the iambic matrix.
smalltowner, underpopulated, see?
collision’s discombobulated, see?
Syntactical/syllabic stresses here
pronunciation’s singularity… etc etc all those lines are perfect iambic pentameter
hey i commented before on this one…smiles…hope you are well…
This form stumps me but you do this very well….nice galactic words and picture ~
Hi Tammy, nice to see your blog. I like this mixing of science and poetry, it’s something I haven’t seen very much of…very nicely done. Cool title too.
Space into poetry, lovely!
Truly more between the empty space then just a flicker, your verse shines bright in galactic proportions.
Ah, you do so well putting science into sonnets! Impressive.
Sometimes, Tammy, I don’t understand everything you say…but you say it so beautifully, the words themselves just mesmerize me. It’s always a trip with you! A journey always worth it! Thank you.
Sometimes I don’t understand what I’m saying either 😉 Thanks for the comment.
I just take the tech and/or science and try to make beauty out of it.
third time is a charm…smiles…i love your galactic poetry though so i could read it again and again…smiles…vivid imagery…as always you bring the world beyond to life…
Your poems are very unique! iLike how you create a love chemistry between science and poetry! 🙂 You are like their Cupid. 🙂
Cheers,
Happy New Year!
ha nice…thanks for taking us into space with your sonnet – and for connecting the laws of science with what happens on earth as well
ohhhh nice visuals!!! thank you for sharing!
http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2011/12/26/singing-myself-to-wake/
I dig your stuff… always feel like I should be in a spaceship to read em tho… 🙂
Excellent words from the end of the universe to us.
Well done! I’m worried to be one (or on one) of the smaller bodies! K.
This is my favorite line: “The spiral arms, distorted from the base”
Lovely sonnet – the universe is such a rich subject 🙂
Even more found as I read a second time, guess like the universe, supposedly, your verse is infinite. To infinity and beyond maybe?..haha
Enjoyed this sonnet!
Hot galactic collision makes for cool poetry. You did it again…Always an interesting journey, Tammy!
breath-taking topic and your did well with it poetically, imho.
What a cosmic fiber you weave with your words… I enjoyed it. Specially since I have had been having a great discussion on the Big Bang and “God Does Not Exist” theory by Stephen Hawking with few of my friends at http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/12/talking-point-god-does-not-exists-says.html which was heavy… and your this verse made me smile and made it all in a different perspective… Thanks for sharing.
Wish you have a great new year ahead…. May you have peace, love and prosperity …
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/12/whisper-no-one-is-there-in-living-haiku.html
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Not your conventional sonnet by any means. What a blast. 😉