Departure
- Departure
Departure
he leaves because he must
this, he recounts each time
he has no need or care for feet
to touch the solid ground.
on to a dumpy dock town,
he sails away once more
in my possession, his treasure,
digging into my diaphragm.
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Posted on August 31, 2011, in http://bluebellbooks.blogspot.com/, Poetry and tagged bluebell books, departure, diaphram, digging, dock, dumpy, leaves, possission, recounts, sails, treasure. Bookmark the permalink. 17 Comments.
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SWEET 🙂
ITS LIKE SHE REALIZES WHY HE HAD TO LEAVE AND AS WELL MISSES HIM. 🙂
FROM,
LIFE
MY ENTRY TO THE SHORT STORY THIS WEEK IS
http://blindfold-princess.blogspot.com/2011/08/awaiting.html?spref=bl
anyone who doesn’t understand why someone has to leave is pretty narcissistic and selfish. people like that don’t deserve relationships, although, somehow, they always seem to be in one. why’s that?
I worked out of town every week for nine years. I hated leaving my wife and home, but it was so wonderful to come home.
Here is my week 9 entry: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/31/dearest-john-2/
crispy and lovely…
Oh, this is wondrous! He leaves in hesitation and she waits in pain. So beautiful. xoXox
This is short and sweet but tells an entire story – it proves , once again , that less IS more !
You’ve told a whole story in two poetic stanzas. There are so many women whose husbands or lovers never return from sea. When I lived in Brittany (France) for a few years, the costal fishing villages all had little chapels with memorials to those lost at sea. Touching story for the image.
reminds me of this song (of course, I prefer sopranos singing it, but this has the lyrics) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7n8zsxygheg&feature=related
Wow! Nicely done. A type of pain that has been experienced before yet a feeling of enchantment as well. 🙂
How is it I wonder, that some heart aches become transcendanta?
I think you’ve touched on that well.
Thanks for sharing that.
John
Fully realized in brevity. Really liked it.
Stu
http://wp.me/p1mecg-dV
The words come alive to touch the reader’s soul with the beautiful painting, which is so appropriate for the theme. You have a unique talent that deserves to be more widely recognized. In time, your works should become in demand throughout the world.
Wow. That is some incredible comment. Thank you.
Love the new look. Hugs.
I love this. I saw the boat coming in and not going out. I saw her standing waiting for the return and not sorrow for the depart. I love the way each person sees this images.
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/05/the-milky-seas/
Well done! You’ve captured the full range of emotions in this one… 🙂
this really touches my heart pulling at it…..