Dirty Laundry Senryu


Dirty Laundry Senryu

beer stains on laundry

lipstick ghost on frayed edges

you laugh as I scrub

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written for Poetry Jam Wednesday, October 12, 2011 “Your Assignment” – write a poem using the words “laugh, laundry, ghost, edges, beer”

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About zongrik

For those of you who do not know the handle "zongrik," that would be Bat-Ami Gordin. Most people call me "Tammy." Bat-Ami means "daughter of my nation" in Hebrew. It's a heavy name to carry around. I answer to either name. I also answer to "mama." Some Basic Things about me: Animal lover, mom, poet/writer, dramatic soprano, photographer, teacher/tutor, CERT/Technician and, oh yeah, aerospace engineer. I consider myself "The Astro-Poet." To learn more about the origins of the word "zongrik" see whats-a-zongrik?

Posted on October 12, 2011, in Poetry, Poetry Jam and tagged , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 19 Comments.

  1. fitting for october, would rather burn than wash, myself. interesting haiku.

  2. I would never laugh @ anyone trying to remove a stain. I might laugh @ how the stain got there in the first place. Laundry is half science and half art, ok not art but chemistry. OK, ok half science, 25% chemistry and 25% art. OK, ok, ok, 25% marketing, 25% science, 25% art and 25% chemistry, but no-one really cares except for the results, that’s what I’m really saying…

  3. this is really good

    amazed you used all the words

    so efficiently…

    good job

    great read 🙂

  4. Interesting, clever….well done

  5. I love it! I thought I wrote with economy, but you win 🙂

  6. Great humor and great use of the limited real estate.

    • i didn’t realize their was a limit. I chose to write a haiku because I wanted to get done as quickly as possible, and it being short, and having so many rules, makes it easier than a free form. I was starting for a Tanka, which has more lines and syllables, I didn’t think I could get it into Haiku format, but alas, that’s how it came out.

  7. WOW! I can’t believe how you used the prompt words ~ amazing.

  8. Not a word wasted, wonderful, even has that marvelous element of drama. Thank you for jamming with us. It was fun to meet you.

  9. three lines, all done?

    one brilliant entry. loved the humor too.

    🙂

  10. Concise and powerful Haiki

    “you laugh as I scrub”

    ok! 🙂

  11. amazing use of the form and words… nice one ~

  12. Very nicely said. Great Senryu…..

    Melanie

  13. Never a fan of haiku but you show why, done right, it can be so effective. Great twist.

  14. Did I do my laundry this week?not sure now.:)

  15. Great use of prompts…amazing.

    I’m with the person who would burn the shirt…forget the stain removal. ☺.

    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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