Dirty Laundry Senryu
Dirty Laundry Senryu
beer stains on laundry
lipstick ghost on frayed edges
you laugh as I scrub
written for Poetry Jam Wednesday, October 12, 2011 “Your Assignment” – write a poem using the words “laugh, laundry, ghost, edges, beer”
Posted on October 12, 2011, in Poetry, Poetry Jam and tagged beer, dirty laundry, edges, frayed, ghost, laundry, lipstick, poetry jam. Bookmark the permalink. 19 Comments.
fitting for october, would rather burn than wash, myself. interesting haiku.
I would never laugh @ anyone trying to remove a stain. I might laugh @ how the stain got there in the first place. Laundry is half science and half art, ok not art but chemistry. OK, ok half science, 25% chemistry and 25% art. OK, ok, ok, 25% marketing, 25% science, 25% art and 25% chemistry, but no-one really cares except for the results, that’s what I’m really saying…
he’s laughing cuz he’s a bad drunk!!
this is really good
amazed you used all the words
great read 🙂
Interesting, clever….well done
I love it! I thought I wrote with economy, but you win 🙂
Great humor and great use of the limited real estate.
i didn’t realize their was a limit. I chose to write a haiku because I wanted to get done as quickly as possible, and it being short, and having so many rules, makes it easier than a free form. I was starting for a Tanka, which has more lines and syllables, I didn’t think I could get it into Haiku format, but alas, that’s how it came out.
WOW! I can’t believe how you used the prompt words ~ amazing.
Not a word wasted, wonderful, even has that marvelous element of drama. Thank you for jamming with us. It was fun to meet you.
three lines, all done?
one brilliant entry. loved the humor too.
Concise and powerful Haiki
“you laugh as I scrub”
amazing use of the form and words… nice one ~
Very nicely said. Great Senryu…..
Never a fan of haiku but you show why, done right, it can be so effective. Great twist.
Did I do my laundry this week?not sure now.:)
LOL. You do your laundry all the time. You live doing your laundry.
Great use of prompts…amazing.
I’m with the person who would burn the shirt…forget the stain removal. ☺.
Siggi in Downeast Maine