Study Red on Green


Red Sunset Over Green Sea

Study Red on Green

drinking wine
basket full of cheese
perfect spring lunch
on the beach

soft iridescence
against a carmine sky
wings reflecting cherry
soaring in the wind

red hot questions
on cool olive sand
volatile lust
in a gust of brine

green ocean spray
choreographed
always in her memory
lines of emptiness

she wants to crush
but in her wicked hands
she holds a green dragonfly
to be caged for life

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This was written and posted for:

dversepoets Play with Color – Posted by Victoria at 

I chose Victoria’s direction : choose two complementary colors (colors that are opposite of one another on the color wheel) and weave them into a single poem and also to choose colors to paint an emotion.

I have studied a lot of color, both pigment and light, so this was fun. Obviously, green and red are complimentary colors. Sometimes the sun looks red, and the sea looks green, thought a picnic under these unique circumstances would be really cool.

I played around with this picture myself.

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About zongrik

For those of you who do not know the handle "zongrik," that would be Bat-Ami Gordin. Most people call me "Tammy." Bat-Ami means "daughter of my nation" in Hebrew. It's a heavy name to carry around. I answer to either name. I also answer to "mama." Some Basic Things about me: Animal lover, mom, poet/writer, dramatic soprano, photographer, teacher/tutor, CERT/Technician and, oh yeah, aerospace engineer. I consider myself "The Astro-Poet." To learn more about the origins of the word "zongrik" see whats-a-zongrik?

Posted on November 5, 2011, in D’verse Poets Pub, Poetry and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 31 Comments.

  1. I just didn’t expect that ending. Wow! I love how you altered the picture to fit the poem. Good choice, using complementary colors. Thanks, Bat-Ami

  2. aww dont cage the dragonfly…they are so cool…nice imagery though…i would rather like a picnic on the beach…def a nice twist at the end…

  3. this starts so lush and lightweight…and such a sad ending..the dragonfly caged for life…ugh… well played on the colors her tammy

  4. Beautiful images here… love the second stanza… powerful ending.

  5. A wonderful piece– I especially loved:

    red hot questions
    on cool olive sand
    volatile lust
    in a gust of brine– !!! http://parolavivace.blogspot.com

  6. Disturbing pic (but nice work on it), and words that become more disturbing as I read on. I like the vividness of colour in the middle stanzas – the carmine sky, red hot questions, green ocean spray.

  7. What was in that vino, anyway … Lots of jagged hues in this picture, and the menace in the caged dragonfly drinks this to its dregs. – Brendan

  8. I was thinking romantic, relaxed interlude and then got slammed by the last two stanzas–excellent piece. ‘volatile lust in a gust of brine…’ nice.

  9. lovely study of colors.. i like these lines:

    red hot questions
    on cool olive sand
    volatile lust
    in a gust of brine

  10. Nice contrasts, colors in metaphor and concrete imagery. Red gives strong feelings of rage and passion at the time in this poem, green seems one of under-the-surface fear of losing, the cause of jealousy without cause. Perhaps I associate these inappropriately, but I thought that might be why she would cage her lovely green dragonfly.

  11. Amazing use of colors and texture – unexpected and sad ending … but she will be quite surprised … the adult, winged stage only lasts a few weeks!! When you see a winged dragonfly, you know it’s toward the end of its lifespan.

  12. Yes, at first I thought this uncharacteristic but then the twist and I knew you lulled me into complacency. Great descriptors and fascinating turn of events, full of wonderful lines (others quoted above).

  13. Beautiful colors here. I loved the carmine sky. K

  14. to the beach we go……

  15. So uplifting to begin with … I guess the atmosphere did not help her turmoil…

  16. It begins so romantically but ends so sad….love your use of color throughout the piece

  17. A great painting with words that you have created with such unusual rare colors!!

  18. great play with the colors and yes, the ending was a stunner..
    nicely done!!

  19. I love the intermingling of images here. The second stanza is so perfect.

  20. Great study of two opposing colors of excitement and sadness.

  21. WOw, this is really packed with emotion. Very evocative write.

  22. great use of colour in this poetic tale that lulls you into a cool place then slaps you in the face ….thanks for sharing x x

  23. playing w/ colors, playing w/ words– a v.interesting game here.

  24. What interesting images your poem conjures in my mind! Particularly love:

    red hot questions
    on cool olive sand
    volatile lust
    in a gust of brine

    Nicely done, Zongrik.

  25. I really like this:

    “soft iridescence
    against a carmine sky
    wings reflecting cherry”

  26. I love everything about this poem! A departure for you, it seems, and an interesting one. The language is full of beautiful visuals, and you lull us into the romance of sea and sand…then O, that sad end to the insect..but beautifully done. Cheers, Tammy!

  27. Very creative…
    interesting and complex.
    A nice take on the prompt…

    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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