Third Class Travel

Crowded Train

Third Class Travel

(based on Third Class in Indian Railways by Mahatma Gandhi)

utter confusion
admission beyond
authorized number

no order, no cleanliness
repulsive din and noise
bribes procure comfort

rush of passengers
cannot be stayed
guards push in even more

talk to management at the terminus

unbearable pressure
exhibitions of temper
free fights break-out

foul refreshments
served by dirtier hands
fasting makes the trip better

flies feast on each morsel
wasps do their work
where flies fail

talk to management at the terminus

spiting and smoking
despite protestations
sitting on dirty floors

lying in filth, no benches
continuation of insanitation
undermines health and morality

dumb and helpless
third-class travelers
too afraid to complain

talk to management at the terminus


Written for: Another Author Tuesday ~ Writing Challenge One  Picture taken from that page.

Also posted on Best Post of The Week

About zongrik

For those of you who do not know the handle "zongrik," that would be Bat-Ami Gordin. Most people call me "Tammy." Bat-Ami means "daughter of my nation" in Hebrew. It's a heavy name to carry around. I answer to either name. I also answer to "mama." Some Basic Things about me: Animal lover, mom, poet/writer, dramatic soprano, photographer, teacher/tutor, CERT/Technician and, oh yeah, aerospace engineer. I consider myself "The Astro-Poet." To learn more about the origins of the word "zongrik" see whats-a-zongrik?

Posted on November 22, 2011, in Poetry, Tuesday ~ Writing Challenge and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 10 Comments.

  1. Go AmTrak!!!

  2. wow…have seen these pictures and can not begin to imagine…and yeah i dont know if i would be complaining either…yikes

  3. Wow Wow Wow!!!

    Fasting makes the trip better?? Cool work!! Enjoyed reading!!

    thanks for participating!! The link is working fine (from my blog)

    with warm regards
    Another Author

  4. Such a shame how people are treated…Thanks for your window into the world of third class traveler

  5. This is wonderfully written…mind boggling knowing you tell the truth.

    A wonderful piece to ponder on for the American Thanksgiving as we number our thanks…
    and we have much to be thankful for even the least of us.

    Thank you,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

  6. Harrowing work. Well done.

  7. The plain truth, plainly told, plainly sad and disgusting. But we need your window into truth, Tammy. Thank you for sharing!

  8. I liked the cool recurring refrain cutting into the heat and dust of the rest. Nice read.

  9. I thought Am Trak was bad,”dumb and helpless third class travelers” say`s it all. very good work.

  10. this was an amazing different experience to be read.. 🙂 seem to frequent more 🙂

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