she cleaned
lugubrious blood
from the corpse
of a bereaved world
not for empowerment

she lived
scratched out tears
lost beliefs
to deep affections


gentle healing time


Written for:

Vice/Versa – Midnight Snack Weekly Prompt #2

Photo Credit: Dechobek at deviantART

About zongrik

For those of you who do not know the handle "zongrik," that would be Bat-Ami Gordin. Most people call me "Tammy." Bat-Ami means "daughter of my nation" in Hebrew. It's a heavy name to carry around. I answer to either name. I also answer to "mama." Some Basic Things about me: Animal lover, mom, poet/writer, dramatic soprano, photographer, teacher/tutor, CERT/Technician and, oh yeah, aerospace engineer. I consider myself "The Astro-Poet." To learn more about the origins of the word "zongrik" see whats-a-zongrik?

Posted on January 11, 2012, in Poetry, Poetry Blog Roll and tagged , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 24 Comments.

  1. This is oozing with sadness. Aptly matching the image prompt! Wonderful usage of the prompt.
    Every word conveys the sorrow so intensely.

  2. a beautiful, moving interpretation of “sorrow” – love especially “scratched out tears lost beliefs” … wonderful and wondrous at the same time …

  3. This is so sad, it conveys so much emotion good writing

  4. Hello.
    The word “lugubrious” sounded like a sad word, so I had to Google it. How fitting for this poem.
    Penned very nicely.
    Thanks for sharing.

    Sorrow Has Entered My Heart

  5. This was ver moving for me!!!!!!


  6. cleaning lugubrious blood from the corpse and scratching out tears…you’ve made something abstract like sorrow very palpable with these images

  7. You , almost manually took sorrow and stretched it out, laying down flat, as I watched it grow … I like your verbs!

  8. I wrote a sad one today for a good friend of mine who is still grieving the loss of her son who died from cancer at aged 39. Heart-felt.

  9. He’s a 10 pound Yorkie, not a toy, I guess he is quite big for a Yorkie though. People ask me if he’s a Silke but, no he’s a pure bred Blue and tan Yorkie. 🙂

  10. I agree with Claudia. The sorrow and pain is palpable here and deeper than the loss of a conveys almost a loss of faith. Well done.

  11. The picture, your empathetic words of the sorrow. Moved me to my heart .

  12. nice…my fav part…

    she lived
    scratched out tears
    lost beliefs
    to deep affections

    def some grit to the feeling in this…very nice…

  13. That sorrow is so deep it takes much away, which sometimes does not ever return.

  14. Beauty in extremity. Not easy to manage. Well done.

  15. Nice poem.. I think I read it on FEPC too. it has come out well with intense imagery ..making pain being felt

  16. Very sad, interesting and not typical word and images choices make the poem unusual too. K.

  17. You amaze me, Tammy. You are able to produce a prolific amount of poetry without sacrificing quality. This is strongly evocative.

  18. This is my favorite:

    “lost beliefs

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