pedestal ivory goddess
Pygmalion
pedestal ivory goddess
pedestal ivory goddess
curves finger traced
on marble gown
thus, sculpted
gustatory impulsive
artistic kisses
rebirth
focalized tongue
perfectionated
appertained chattel
steered daily
soothing, changing, disengaging
dovetailed shapes
though empirical junctures
and worrisome intangible ontologies
deliberately she cracks
dominated by overseen epochs
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Today’s prompt was to “praise of a present-day hero, someone who has made a difference in your own life.” I always did like My Fair Lady and the concept of creating your own perfect love. I create my characters in my fiction with this ubermensch in mind. Thus this is to Professor Higgins, or is it to George B. Shaw? Or is it to a Venusian statue? This is poetry…so you may interpret as you please.
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Posted on February 16, 2012, in D’verse Poets Pub, Poetry and tagged dversepoets, George Bernard Shaw, hero, hero worship, ivory goddess verse, Pygmalion, ubermensch, ubermensch verse, verse. Bookmark the permalink. 19 Comments.
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Amazing word choices… quite a mouthful… very nice.
I agree with Laurie, very nice!
I liked the poem a lot…and like the explanation of why you wrote it also.
Thanks,
Peace
Siggi in Downeast Maine
Quite eloquent, and can definitely be viewed from numerous angles. Wonderful write!
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fissures find their way to form into cracks….I admire this for recognizing the imperfect nature of what me put our faith in
Peace
nice…i love that line ‘deliberately she cracks’…the rest is wonderful of course but that one stood out to me…
Smiles. I could watch “My Fair Lady” over and over again. Sad thing is, I once had a boyfriend who thought he was Higgins…that didn’t last long. Beautiful writing/words as others have noted.
Very nice!
Very classical, very true.
love the language you’ve woven into the piece…despite her cracks, she still stands strong though. The piece, equally so
I got a feeling that this could be about creating a perception of love around someone who doesn’t necessarily fulfil it. Placing someone on a pedestal, like a piece of art, but ‘deliberately cracking by overseen epochs’ meaning that the cracks are deliberately being shown in a relationship that was over a long time ago (but not seen, or ignored by the one who loves without seeing its failure. Complicated wordplay and found it challenging- but this is GOOD thing!
I like the fact that she knows she isn’t imperfect but, she also knows she doesn’t have to be. Very nice piece and tribute to one or all three of your hero’s involved in this weave of words.
You have diisplayed a formidable vocabulary as well as a nearly-nude marble Pygmalion! 🙂
You use words beautifully. I like your explanation.
I’m kind of conflicted here between the nod to Prof Higgins and the negative (to me) picture of his created perfection…but as you say, it’s poetry, so it can do two things(or more) at once. Sharp use of language and image.
enjoyed the piece much…esp..
deliberately she cracks
dominated by overseen epochs…this is just an awesome, perfect closure..
wow!! I love each stanza…that is the beauty of poetry. It can be interpreted differently with each reader….deliberately she cracks dominated by overseen epoch…that tells me she had enough
Such a clever take on this prompt – and I recognize the piece the Louvre … which is absolutely stunning … brava
I particularly enjoyed these descriptions:
“gustatory impulsive
artistic kisses”
“deliberately she cracks
dominated by overseen epochs”