semantic feeling


Nightmare

semantic feeling

influential
artificial earthquake
semantic feeling

broken
rammed
under
railway

conspiracy in this world
violent shade
restoration imaginary

surviving
tsunami
swim
carrying puppy
to help

surprising reaction
careless commandments
distressful disconnects

memorable
formless
detonating
irresolute

*****************************

Written for:

Poetics: Nightmare Verse

Also posted on:

S is for Signs

Photo credit: lucyluh on Deviant art

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About zongrik

For those of you who do not know the handle "zongrik," that would be Bat-Ami Gordin. Most people call me "Tammy." Bat-Ami means "daughter of my nation" in Hebrew. It's a heavy name to carry around. I answer to either name. I also answer to "mama." Some Basic Things about me: Animal lover, mom, poet/writer, dramatic soprano, photographer, teacher/tutor, CERT/Technician and, oh yeah, aerospace engineer. I consider myself "The Astro-Poet." To learn more about the origins of the word "zongrik" see whats-a-zongrik?

Posted on April 2, 2012, in ABC wednesday, D’verse Poets Pub, Poetry and tagged , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 19 Comments.

  1. Thanks for the wonderful words to fit the prompt perfectly.
    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

  2. Whew. Powerful words. Well done.

  3. nice…really cool structure with the short verse followed by a cascade of words…some great turns of phrase, artificial earth quake, violent shade, careless commandments

  4. very intense in its brevity..loved the careless commandments
    distressful disconnects…nicely spun tammy

  5. Cool write. Really like the shortness to each line, adds an air of intensity. Some very cool images here. Thanks

  6. That was quite a unique piece!
    Loved the title 🙂

  7. Fits the prompt really well.

  8. Careless commandments and distressed disconnects–certainly where we find ourselves in chaos of modern age. K.

  9. you see the world in two different shades of word play. very cool.

  10. I commented earlier, but I neglected to mention what a great (well horrifying) pic this is! K.

  11. I love these lines:

    memorable
    formless
    detonating
    irresolute

    Great take on the prompt

  12. short and sharp ! …great write and a great pic …thanks so much for sharing x x

  13. truly a feeling of immediacy

  14. You really pulled all of this together… the disconnects seemed to flow easily into the next thought.
    Great stuff my friend.

  15. I am first captured by the photo by lucyluh at Deviant Art and the your words send shivers of truth to me.

  16. we can all relate to this,nice write.

  17. awash in your fine words
    ROG, ABC Wednesday team

  18. Very nice!

    S is for..
    Rose, ABC Wednesday Team

  19. Like another poster, I was drawn first to that Striking photograph and then to the potent words.

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