when time races like a bullet
Earth from space with blue light trails
when time races like a bullet
when time races like a bullet,
there is little victory.
always sad. insidious
wishes: to live in sanity.
treasuring a secret escape.
leaving behind all others.
accustomed to violations.
brazen flouting; turgid power.
we laugh, then suddenly get it.
we slip-on growls and howls for props.
we live under protective
old school, flatulent leadership.
totalitarian rulers and
autocratic governments
abolish metaphoric gods:
practice chivalric sciences.
a flock of pushovers. we are nails.
thus, hammers malign our ears.
fish eyes, two blurry bubbles,
behold abiding borderlands.
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Written for:
FormForAll – Sprung Rhythm
Also posted on:
Wild and Wonderful West Virginia
Image credit: free web photo
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Posted on May 17, 2012, in ABC wednesday, D’verse Poets Pub, Poetry and tagged abc wednesday, bullet, chirbit, dversepoets, online poetry, Pacific Northwest Ballet, poetics, Poetry Blogroll, poetry prompt, poetry sharing, prompted verse, sprung rhythm, tachyon, time racing. Bookmark the permalink. 24 Comments.
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dang that last stanza is tight and conviction words…we are you know…strong statement in this…nicely doen poeticly too…your off rhymes are really cool…
I liketh very much. Cannot comment on form, but I liked the boldness of your words and conviction of presentation.
very cool off-beat rhythm in this…and it fits just perfectly with the topic..
Strong marching rhythm here, the meter has a kind of intensity. k.
Reading this one again – it is one of my favorites of yours==wonderful descriptions of difficult times. k.
Nice… I especially like the 3rd and 4th stanzas.
Strong stresses beat out a heart’s desire; the voice of those who yearn for peace and order without corruption, without greed. A protest of those who need to profit from bringing other people to heel. Great language here. The beats made it feel modern, current. Liked it a lot! I think you managed that strong beat throughout.
Hasn’t this prompt produced some cracking poems?! Yours up there with the best. I love the strength of conviction evident throughout.
Oooo this is so good. We laugh, then afterwards we suddenly ‘get’ the joke and hoot and howl to let others know we’re so clever ’cause we ‘got it’. Yes, we are all led like sheep whichever way the powers that be wish us to go.
This rocks!
There is so little victory and what we have is an illusion, as is defeat..
Like this a lot, especially this line: “we slip-on growls and howls for props.” Good one!
Flatulent leadership!? No kidding!
Your pic looks like the rays that the atoms travel and bounce back from the ring pass not.
More here
http://planetcyberluz.com/2011/11/11/atoms-and-evolution
strong sentiments written in a fab beat ….thanks for sharing x
Insidious, indeed.
Fine piece.
“treasuring a secret escape.
leaving all who were left back there.
accustomed to being trampled;
brazen flouting; turgid power”
That is life! we do our own thing but still there are elements that bother us. Great round off of life’s journey, Tammy!
Hank
This is strong. I especially like the last two lines. Really nice.
excellent write so much going on there.
My dear friend,
Very interesting post here. Would you believe love is greater than time? To me it is, for time changes with every second, but love, when its TRUE, never changes (smile). Thanks for sharing.
Shalom Bat-Ami. There is so much in this poem I’ll have to read it several times.
And yes, I also find the Dead Sea water slimy and stinging.
Love the imagery in your title – when time races like a bullet.
Very nice. I love the contrast between the poem and the image too.
Wonderful.
Wonderful wordplay!
ROG, ABC Wednesday team