Sexy Hits the Streets
Sexy Hits the Streets
retro-ethnic, ultra-elaborated, seemingly fumbling.
stylized euro haut nerd, tantalizingly puzzling.
irritably snuggling. culture jammed juggling.
breaking every curfew; playing without struggling.
padded exterior, vegan interior.
hands in pockets, a screwed up sneer.
hiding high tech hardware; antiquated software:
hollow products marketed by deluded grandeur.
clam-shelling her cell phone, into a comma.
emerging from trauma, perpetual drama.
surrounded by lobotomized, inaccessible nirvanas.
never wears pajamas, has too many mamas.
she doesn’t need batteries, intrepid, bi-legged.
strolls nonchalantly on an invisible grid.
aqueously translucent, cloudless, pellucid.
butt-side down, with flippant, fetid method.
in-focus, sharp, progressive equation.
a-rhythmic, a-temporal: low level potation.
curated, moving art of bio-mass accretion.
inhalation, provocation, seductive-temptation.
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Written for:
Poetics: It’s Tempting!
Sorry no image this time.
Posted on May 11, 2013, in D’verse Poets Pub, Poetry and tagged alliterative poetry, alliterative verse, dversepoets, high tech poetry, online poetry, poetics, Poetry & Prompts, poetry prompt, poetry sharing, sound cloud, temptation, writing prompt. Bookmark the permalink. 18 Comments.
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hiding high tech hardware; antiquated software:
hollow products marketed by deluded grandeur.
ha, cool lines…like the character you create in this…
cool phrasing too like clam shelling her phone…
i read it at a little quicker clip than your reading of it..
cause its got a pow pow feel to it
She is all that……..definitely has that boom boom pow pow as BM eluded to
This is a slam dunk, Tammy…metallic, hard rock sexy.!
bang – bang – bang – love the fast paced almost machine gun like use of images here and you paint her character well – very cool piece tammy
What a character, like machinery .. sad really and I like the hint of her inside of every allure being like a hard shell (which I think she has to have).. and yes the pace and rhymes really would work well to the click-clack of high heels on the street… well written.
Fast paced attitude – I can see her walking down the street – no stopping her.
Great music and flow here Tammy = she seems very vulnerable this girl, for all the metallic gizmos. My favorite image is the “lobotomized, inaccessible nirvanas.” Thanks .k.
I love the ‘clip’ of this poem. It moves along well, almost as well as the woman it describes so well. I can see her moving down the street, her heels clicking on the pavement, seductively tempting indeed!
You said a mouthful, Tammy. Nicely done!
A screwed up sneer, she looks ready for the kill ~
Oh, my. So much incredible word use here, rhyme and internal rhyme. Excellent.
Wow, street beat plush & fabulous, poeticized to the max !! Aptly titled !!
That wonderful photo sure sets the scene! It was good to be able to hear you speak the poem.
This felt a bit like Steampunk poetry. Sorry about the problems with the picture.
Oh, this was so vivid, so much fun to read, I didn’t need the picture.
So many cool lines in this, I’d have 1/2 the write in the comment if I tried. Such amazing visuals in this.
Complimenti, questo post ha davvero stimolato il mio interesse.
I like the cut of your jib. Your use of vocabulary, and your linking of phrases and ideas together, and the rhythm and rhyme of this are all amazing. -Mike