suffocated reflection
Reflections
suffocated reflection
tortured self-portrait
suffocated reflection
poignantly decorated
desolation and regret
cultivated condensation
impressive procrastination
informal ingenuity
rhetorical apprehension
marked musical measures
meolodious sylvan clank
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Written for:
Patterns, Pictures and Poems
Photo credit: James Rainsford
Posted on March 24, 2012, in D’verse Poets Pub, Poetry and tagged dversepoets, Elements of Art, James Rainsford, Patterns, Photography as Art, prompted poetry, prompted verse, reflections, Victoria C. Slotto. Bookmark the permalink. 23 Comments.
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ugh…you def put a lot of hard feeling into the picture…nice word pairings to create that feel as well…the clank at the end rings hollow…
“marked musical measures
meolodious sylvan clank” – it rolls off the tongue, fascinating!
I loved these lines too! Especially the change in rhythm that came -ironically- with the first. Bravo for setting such a heavy/loud atmosphere!
This hits home. Yes, right to the hollow ‘clank’
Wow! Impressive AND poignant. And yes, the clank. You have nailed so much here.
Some great word choices, here, Bat-Ami. I like the pairings, the couplets.
I also love the word choice in this, so much packed into so few words!
Ditto to what everyone’s already said… I especially like the clank.
Tortured Self Portrait Suffocated Reflection … now that is something I can relate to … sigh 🙂
I’am sorry I missed you. this is some deep. ….I ditto with the relating bit.
some awesome word choices here! love how you put this together! 🙂
I don’t know that the clank makes this go so much as the way you condense all to a hollow resounding of words that simply seem to lose all meaning. I mean that in the best possible way. For, as a response to the photo, the hollowness of the poem’s words echo the supposed hollowness of the person in the photo seeking some form of solace from a life of despair.
This brought to my mind Self-Portrait in a Convex Mirror, the way we all see ourselves in a distorted manner. Your poem employs an expansive depth which continues to unfold in my mind.
Duality in each pair, much like the duality of the image–and the darkness around the edge crowding the reflections.
Love the rhythm of this. Goes well with a determined stride in the park.
Melodious sylvan clank is wonderful (as is rest.) K.
some heavy heavy word play.
I picked up an element of torment in the figure. You are the first I’ve read who mentions it. Great response to the prompt.
I love the great economy of language in this. You’ve managed to convey the isolation and tension in the photo with a few well chosen juxtapositions. Brilliant!
suffocated reflections…you put him on a very lonely walk here…but could be he is…
loneliness jumps out
The first four lines sure jump out at me. Ouch.
“Melodious sylvan clank.” (Typo there, but my favorite phrase…) Marvelous phrasing and pace, and it packs a punch. Well done, my friend! Amy
Missed Mr. Linky by 17 min, but here’s mine: http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/03/25/california-dreamer-dverse/